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1. 86 year old is hit by a dump truck.
2. Run down while crossing the street of downtown Ottawa.
3. Building bridges to direct big truck traffic away from the city.
4. People living and working downtown are in danger.
5. Newly appointed transport minister.
Therefore
Having large trucks drive around with many pedestrians is dangerous.
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1. Boy in Toronto arrested for bringing gun to school
2. 1,200 students under lock down.
3. Streets nearby also locked down
4. Boy showed off hand gun to peers
Therefore
We need to do drills in order to make these types of incidents run smoothly
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The points are good (they're quite similar to mine), but - and correct me if I'm wrong - I think you need to use just a bit more detail with your points (maybe use more of the sentence that the point is stated in).... but don't take my word on it.
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